Thrilling FanFics by me?! UPDATE (OnlineReader,PDF,MP3,Exclu

[Eve]

New post, some news.

First off, again and again I can't tell you all how sorry I am for not having posted some new chapters in here for a long time now. I took a writing break and I damn did need that one. By now, I think I have fully 'recovered' and hey, my head is full of all new ideas just waiting in it to be written down at some point. So, I finally can get back to this story and I'm writing on it the moment you read this message.

My current goal for a new release is August, 17th. And then, I'll release most likely more than just one chapter and it will be long ones (, I assume).

So, have some great days and be sure to check back in here on August, 17th! I'm counting on you and of course, on myself.

Until then,


Akai-kun.

I'll be waiting for Aug. 17th then ^^

[akai-kun]

New post, some news.

First off, again and again I can't tell you all how sorry I am for not having posted some new chapters in here for a long time now. I took a writing break and I damn did need that one. By now, I think I have fully 'recovered' and hey, my head is full of all new ideas just waiting in it to be written down at some point. So, I finally can get back to this story and I'm writing on it the moment you read this message.

My current goal for a new release is August, 17th. And then, I'll release most likely more than just one chapter and it will be long ones (, I assume).

So, have some great days and be sure to check back in here on August, 17th! I'm counting on you and of course, on myself.

Until then,


Akai-kun.

I'll be waiting for Aug. 17th then ^^

That's great. Thx for commenting, btw. And I have some new updates to share:

1) August, 17th is confirmed as the new release date.
2) At least two (most likely three) chapters are confirmed as well.
3) The great man in the background controlling all the events and who is responsible for the murder of Robert Sikaln will have his first appearance in the story.
4) And last but not least, I'm happy to tell you all that my writing style is better than ever before! No joking. I just re-read my latest chapter and I must say, it reads itself like a real thriller story, a book.

So, as well as you all out there hanging in, I'm looking forward to August, 17th.


See you all here on August, 17th.

Until then,


Akai-kun.

[akai-kun]

So, just one day away from August, 17th and I am ill for some days now. It's getting better right now, so I'm using this short time to post the sad news here. But for the following:

1) August, 17th is confirmed as the new release date.
2) At least two (most likely three) chapters are confirmed as well.

1) August, 17th is still set to be the first release date.
2) Due to my illness, I won't manage releasing three chapters and I'm not quite sure if I'll even be able to release two, but one is for sure. And if it is only one for tomorrow, I will release some more right after my illness vanished which, I hope, is soon...

So, hopefully, I'll get better very soon but let's enjoy tomorrow's release whether there is one explosive or two great chapters.

See you tomorrow~ 8)

[akai-kun]

***RELEASE - AUGUST, 17th***

And here we are, August, 17th is upon us and therefore an all new and (literally) explosive chapter is as well. Due to my sudden illness the last few days (5 to be exact), I hadn't had the chance to write more, so it'll only be one for today but since I'm getting better again and I'm feeling well by now (let's hope this stays that way ), I will start to release more chapters very soon, promised.

But for today's release:

My writing style improved again, I'd say, what's your opinion on that? So, this chapter is the first in a row where the whole content of all the previous chapters is about to be making sense. You'll get to see some men from behind the curtains (including more about James Black), international affairs and so on.

Additional facts: If you include the two words 'Chapter 32' in your counting, this chapter is 980 words long (in words: nine hundred and eighty words!) and is therefore the longest in history in here, I think. Next, I'm using Yen as currency in this chapter, so I'm giving you a heads-up and tell you what it is like in U.S. Dollars: 60 million Yen = ~700,000 $ and 900 million Yen = ~10.5 million $.

Okay, I have to cut this here short. So, with no further unnecessary writing, here's the new chapter:


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ONLINE READER (08-17-10):

CHAPTER 32

‘Time’s running out’, the man, whose entire body was hidden in the shadows of the dark-lightened room, whispered with a low and old sounding voice, not hiding his British accent. A small pause followed his words until he spoke again and crushed the built-up silence. ‘And I’m tired of listening to your excuses, Damian. Yes, you may have killed this, what was his name again, Sikaln? But you didn’t get the answers out of him.' He took another pause before he let his voice sound up again. This time, he sounded more angry than tired. ‘I paid you 900 million Yen and what do you give me for them? A lonely ‘I’m sorry’? I’m sorry, because that isn’t an acceptable term of repayment.' With his hand he signalized one of his men guarding the entrance to come here. His hand didn’t look anything like a hand but what did he care. This man certainly was old, why was he surprised by the look of his hand? The man who did came from the entrance suddenly stood behind him and pressed the cold feeling barrel of a 46 Magnum against his head. ‘Hey, stop that, old man. You can’t do that. It wasn’t my fault he didn’t talk.' Absolute silence drifted through the room, from one edge to the other. Slowly, the armchair turned around and Damian got a look at the old man sitting in it. The man was in his late 80s and his red eyes showed the illness he suffered from. The doctors he consulted the last months didn’t even give him one more month to live. At least, not even four complete weeks. His face was a compilation of wrinkles and warts. ‘Not your mistake? Oh, son, I know.' Damian breathed out, a little bit relieved. ‘Moreover, it was your failure! And on failure, a good old gentleman from Britain knows only one answer, erasing the reason of the failure.' He faced his man quietly standing behind Damian and nodded. ‘Kill him.' ‘NO! You can’t do that, no, please, nooooo…' His yell was still echoing in the room even after the assassin or bodyguard or whoever he was, had pulled the trigger, or so it seemed. Damian’s dead body was laying face down on the floor, releasing blood all over the handmade cotton carpet made in the ancient Japan which decorated the office. The carpet was worth about 60 million Yen these days but the old man mustn’t worry about it, he was rich, damn rich. ‘Get his body away and then leave me alone for some time, I have to think what to do next…'

At exactly the same time, approximately 7.5 miles away…

Takagi rushed into the scene. ‘Inspector Megure! Is everything alright? Are you okay? I just heard about the explosion and that you were injured in it. Police radio is running hot by now. So, are you…' Megure quickly raised his hand and stopped Takagi from going on. ‘It’s okay, Takagi, I’m alright. Well, as of now.' ‘Thank God. Sato, Chiba and Shiratori will be so pleased to hear that you’re okay. But what the hell happened here? This is, was, a police headquarter, not a trainings camp for terrorists. Do we know more about who did that and why so?' ‘I’m afraid not’, a new voice answered and by turning their heads around they noticed a tall man wearing sunglasses making his way towards them. ‘But where are my manners? I’m Special Agent Curton from Internal Affairs Division Worldwide, CIA,' the man introduced himself. And now, Kid recognized the voice of the agent. He had heard it not very long ago, on the roof where a CIA operative killed Agent Nalters. The killer then spoke to him on the phone. It has been this Agent Curton. He got a bad feeling about what all would be coming up… Then, the moment came. Agent Curton faced him and offered him his hand. He shake it, hoping his normal clothes he had changed in just a short while ago, a pair of blue jeans and a black shirt with the letters F.B.I., how ironically, would save him from the discovery of him being Kaito Kid who happened to watch Curton killing Nalters. It did, at least for now, but how long would it still do?

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Again at exactly the same time and again some few more miles away…

Black shoes. Check. Black costume. Check. Red tie with a slight brown touch. Check. ID. Check. James Black was ready to go. Even some criminal mastermind leading an unknown underground organization who operates worldwide for the highest bidders had to live his cover. Killings, assassinations, bombings, terrorism. That all was just a little part of the possibilities they offered, and did for the right prize. They had no name but whoever was desperate enough for their services got them. They knew, sometimes even before their own clients, that they could provide the services that were needed. Good, it was an advantage for them that they had much influence on the inventors of the globally the widest spread search machine on the Internet but it wasn’t all what spoke for them. 100% success and a great customer service, they even offered them a money-payback if they failed to solve their clients’ problems. But then, due to the help of this little boy, Conan Edogawa, they came across the existence of another underground organization here in Japan, called the ‘Black Organization’. They would have to eliminate this grouping first if they were to be the only ones. And so did his cover came into the game: James Black, director of the F.B.I. It was a perfect cover, no one knew the truth about him and that was his best chance they, he ever had on destroying the counter organization. And it was about damn time…


[…] -to be continued- [...]



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Okay, that's it for now, I'm hoping I can release more soon, we'll find out. Until then, enjoy (re-)reading the chapters and please comment (!), thx.

Later,

Akai-kun.

[akai-kun]

Okay, from August, 17th to now is a looong time but life still keeps to interfere.
But to my point: I haven't written anything from that day on on nearly no story, but I well have some chapters in my hands for the future already. Point is, I don't know if I can release new chapters the next week or some weeks after that because it all depends on DCTP's release of Movie 14. If it is not before October, 31st/November, 1st, I think I can update some but if it's earlier it will have to wait (-> International Edition).

BUT: There are updates coming and thanks (!!!!!!!!!!!!!! BIG ONES !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!) to all of you who are hanging in there right now. THANK YOU ALL!

So, see you soon here~

[akai-kun]

And Movie 14 is out earlier then I expected and therfore, I'm now watching the movie and then working on the IE. So, there will be a few days (?) without an update, but I have some chapters up my sleeve by the following weeks...

[akai-kun]

And here comes the news:


ALL-NEW UPDATES ARE COMING IN EARLY DECEMBER!

Okay, I still hope, I can get some few chapters out in mid/end November but for general, all-new updates on any of my FFs will come out not before early December.
Short post here, see you next time.
AND AGAIN, BIG THANKS FOR YOUR PATIENCE!

[akai-kun]

Okay, so it will be December but to shorten the the waiting time a little bit, here is the beginning of the next chapter, enjoy.


"FBI Foreign HQ:

James Black entered the building with a  smile on his face. It was so ironic, him being able to do such a thing. Who would have suspected that he was the boss of the propably most dangerous criminal organization in the world? And then, they came. That black organization as the FBI calls them. Who is behind them and why did they just appear a few years ago? But why did he even bother? These questions would all be answered in a short matter of time, there was no doubt about it. "


Any thoughts already on how the story will develop or anything else, feel free to post it here.
New updates are coming soon.

[akai-kun]

As you may have already guessed from the first few lines above this post, a showdown is hitting the story within the next chapters. Not the final one, but the pre-final one because this story won't be an endless one, that's for sure.

The next update is coming just two or three days before December, 31 and another new one will around New Year's Eve. And it will be great ones, I'm completely sure. But for that matter, what did you think of the latest chapter and the latest lines? What are your predictions on how the story will develop? And most importantly, did you like them?
Tell me and post a comment here or if you don't want to, just send me a PM, I really want to hear your opinion on my on-going story.

So, until next time and have a great week,

akai-kun 8).

[sstimson]

[quote="akai-kun"][/quote]
***Edited Dec 31 2010 - RELEASE - AUGUST, 17th***

CHAPTER 32

    ‘Time’s running out’, Whispered the man whose entire body was hidden in the shadows of the dark-lightened room.  â€˜And I’m tired of listening to your excuses, Damian. Yes, you may have killed this, what was his name again, Sikaln? But you didn’t get any answers out of him. I paiy you 900 million Yen and what do you give me for that? A sorry ‘I’m sorry’? I’m sorry, because that isn’t an acceptable.' He signalized one of his men.  A man suddenly stood Damian and pressed the cold feeling barrel of a 46 Magnum against his head.

    ‘Hey, stop that! You can’t do that. It wasn’t my fault he didn’t talk.' Damian said, starting to worry. Absolute silence drifted through the room, from one edge to the other. Slowly, the armchair turned around and Damian got a look at the person sitting there. The man was in his late 80s and his red eyes showed the illness he was suffering  from. His face was a compilation of wrinkles and warts.

    ‘Not your mistake? Oh, son, I know.' said the chair's occupant. Damian breathed out, a little bit relieved. ‘Moreover, it was your failure! And on failure, British gentleman knows only one answer, erasing the failure.' He faced his man quietly standing behind Damian and nodded. ‘Kill him.'

‘NO! You can’t do that, no, please, nooooo…' His yell was still echoing in the room even after the  trigger was pulled.

Damian’s dead body was laying face down on the floor, releasing blood all over the handmade cotton carpet made in the ancient Japan which decorated the office. The carpet was worth about 60 million Yen these days. ‘Take his body away and then leave me alone for awhile. I have to think about what is next…'

At exactly the same time, approximately 7.5 miles away…

Takagi rushed into the scene. ‘Inspector Megure! Is everything alright? Are you okay? I just heard about the explosion and that you were injured in it. Police radio is running hot by now. So, are you…' Megure quickly raised his hand and stopped Takagi from going on. ‘It’s okay, Takagi, I’m alright. Well, as of now.' ‘Thank God. Sato, Chiba and Shiratori will be so pleased to hear that you’re okay. But what the hell happened here? This is, was, a police headquarter, not a trainings camp for terrorists. Do we know more about who did that and why so?' ‘I’m afraid not’, a new voice answered and by turning their heads around they noticed a tall man wearing sunglasses making his way towards them. ‘But where are my manners? I’m Special Agent Curton from Internal Affairs Division Worldwide, CIA,' the man introduced himself. And now, Kid recognized the voice of the agent. He had heard it not very long ago, on the roof where a CIA operative killed Agent Nalters. The killer then spoke to him on the phone. It has been this Agent Curton. He got a bad feeling about what all would be coming up… Then, the moment came. Agent Curton faced him and offered him his hand. He shake it, hoping his normal clothes he had changed in just a short while ago, a pair of blue jeans and a black shirt with the letters F.B.I., how ironically, would save him from the discovery of him being Kaito Kid who happened to watch Curton killing Nalters. It did, at least for now, but how long would it still do?

----------

Again at exactly the same time and again some few more miles away…

Black shoes. Check. Black costume. Check. Red tie with a slight brown touch. Check. ID. Check. James Black was ready to go. Even some criminal mastermind leading an unknown underground organization who operates worldwide for the highest bidders had to live his cover. Killings, assassinations, bombings, terrorism. That all was just a little part of the possibilities they offered, and did for the right prize. They had no name but whoever was desperate enough for their services got them. They knew, sometimes even before their own clients, that they could provide the services that were needed. Good, it was an advantage for them that they had much influence on the inventors of the globally the widest spread search machine on the Internet but it wasn’t all what spoke for them. 100% success and a great customer service, they even offered them a money-payback if they failed to solve their clients’ problems. But then, due to the help of this little boy, Conan Edogawa, they came across the existence of another underground organization here in Japan, called the ‘Black Organization’. They would have to eliminate this grouping first if they were to be the only ones. And so did his cover came into the game: James Black, director of the F.B.I. It was a perfect cover, no one knew the truth about him and that was his best chance they, he ever had on destroying the counter organization. And it was about damn time…


[…] -to be continued- [...]

Editor Notes: (12-31-10) You are to me at least giving a lot of unneccerssary detail and it is taking away from the story. The place to put some of this detail is when you introduce new characters. Also not sure at points who is talking. You seem to jump from one point of view to another. It ok to do this, but give some warming like a new paragraph. Also at points you are repeating your self several times. This edit is a draft being that I am being rushed a little bit.
    You are also mixing your tense past and present. When you present new information, think about who should know what. Example is that Damian should not know anything about The Old guys Doctor or what the doctor told him. Try to keep you details together with the right character knowing the right thing.
    Paragraph one and two are now ok, but the third ( and on ) needs work I currently do not have time for.

The stuff in green is ready. It has been edited. The rest is being worked on.

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Your new sub part of chapter

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"FBI Foreign HQ:

James Black entered the building with a smile on his face. It was so ironic, him being able to do such a thing. Who would have suspected that he was the boss of the probably most dangerous criminal organization in the world. And then, they came. That black organization as the FBI calls them. Who is behind them and why did they just appear a few years ago? But why did he even bother? These questions would all be answered in a short matter of time, there was no doubt about it. "

Yeks!! Question before I try to edit this part: If James Black is the Bo Boss, then why is he asking those questions

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Possible edit - ( This looks more like teasers )

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    "FBI Foreign HQ:

James Black entered the building with a smile on his face. It was so ironic, him being able to do such a thing.

...

Who would have suspected that he was the boss of the probably most dangerous criminal organization in the world?

...

But why did he even bother?

...

And then, they came. That black organization as the FBI calls them.

...

Who is behind them and why did they just appear a few years ago?  These questions would all be answered in a short matter of time, there was no doubt about it. "

[akai-kun]

@ sstimson: First off, thank you so much for the edit!!!!!! Awesome as always.

And for your question, James Black is NOT the boss of the BO, he's the boss of another powerful org. that was 'run over' by the BO and that's why he's helping the FBI as their boss to catch the BO...

With further plot developing, I think I can express what I mean better and after that, I can guarantee one hell of a showdown. 8)

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@ all:  SORRY for the lack of updates here, life took all my time and threw it out of the window, you'd think you would have had a burn-out, but luckily not for me, and now, to cut things short, I'm back.

NEW UPDATES WILL HIT THE THREAD SOON!
(Possible Release Date: ~ 02/13/11)

[akai-kun]

Short Notice: I just saw this topic was read over 11,067 times.

THANK YOU ALL FOR YOUR CONTINUING SUPPORT!!!!

[akai-kun]

This topic has now been read over 11,200 times. Thanks for your contnuing support.
I'm currently writing on a new chapter and I'm hoping to release it today(!).

And there is a big twist coming around that I think no one in here thought of, it will blow your minds, it's such a damn awesome twist, I couldn't even believe myself writing such one.

Be sure to stay online and check for an all-new update, coming (most likely) around today.

[akai-kun]

And here is the promised new chapter, its twist will leave you stunned and speechless, I can say that. Post your thoughts, feelings and comments about it here and maybe you can guess or figure out what operation 'Blind Eagle' stands for.
I want to hear your theories about it.

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CHAPTER 33
- James Black

‘One by one is not to be feared but when they’re fighting together at some point it is too late to fear them, they might have already won.'

FBI Foreign HQ, several years ago…

James Black entered the building with a smile on his face. The day was sunny and the air was fresh, pretty untypical for the city of Tokyo. He took the elevator up as every morning and he stopped on the 10th floor. Just as he put his left feed outside the elevator, another agent greeted him.

‘Morning, James.' ‘Morning, Phil.'

He walked past the row of desks, he did see every single time he came in here, walking to his bureau at the end of the room, right in front of the windows. Having arrived at his front door, he entered his office, stepped in and closed the door behind him, just now noticing the agent sitting in his chair. ‘What the hell are you doing in my chair? And who are you?' Smiling, the man stood up and greeted back while still looking out the windows, standing backwards to Black. ‘Well, that are many complicated questions, James. And I don’t think you’d even understand why all of this is and will be happening. But to answer your last question, I am James Black, I am you.'

He turned around and as impossible as it was, there he was, standing in front of him, he himself. You couldn’t tell who was the right one anymore if you would have just entered the room. The only difference between them was the 45 caliber gun the other man was aiming at him and without even having the chance to call for help or move, the man pulled the trigger…

*****

Some people say, when you know you will die, you get to see your whole life in a flash but there was nothing like that or even close to. Everything he saw was himself shooting him and the golden bullet flying through the air towards him. He wasn’t frightened or angry, no, the complete opposite, he was as calm as never in his whole life and with every millisecond passing, he got calmer and calmer. He had never thought that this was how he was going to die, being shot while staying there, totally calm and tired. He was tired of living, he could not say why but it was as his body would scream for the bullet to come and hit him, causing his immediate death. Longing to have it ending, he raised his arms a little and opened as he would say, ‘come bullet, hit me’. He took a deep breath and then the bullet hit his chest, right in the heart. Being thrown back, he fell to the ground and stopped breathing. His face showed nothing, no expression, no nothing, not even a sign of redemption.

James Black was dead…

*****

The man grabbed Black’s legs and stuffed his dead body into a plastic bag half full of garbage. ‘Fitting’, he thought and let the bag stand in a hidden corner in the room. He would take care of it later. Now he had more important things to handle, he had to become the perfect copy of James Black so that no one would notice the difference…

*****

Now…

James Black smiled, until now his plan had worked perfect. Not even one agent had notice the change in command. He was a little bit proud of himself but in his business, he couldn’t allow to show feelings to obvious, they would uncover him and therefore kill him. They always taught him never to show feelings. They had always watched over him and trained him when he turned 14. He owed them everything he now was and all he would be soon, now that the final phase of operation ‘Blind Eagle’ had begun.

This all would soon be over and he would be a damn rich man by then and that was all what counted.

[...] To be continued! [...]

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So, I hope you enjoyed reading and I hope, you're speechless by the twist but not too speechless not to comment.

The next update will be within the next days, maybe even tomorrow.

[akai-kun]

Author Commentary #01

Okay, so this author commentary thing will stay from now on and be here for every new update and chapter.
Since this is the first one, welcome.

As you may have already noticed, the first lines of the update are different to those I posted a long time back then. That is due to a big plot change I came up with yesterday. I let James Black (JB) stay a hero because I'm a big fan of his character and so I had to make it different.

I hope you like the new direction the story is developing to and if so, I can promise you, the story will blow your minds with further plot.

Why did I choose to go on that way?

Well, JB is one of my favourite characters in 'Detective Conan' and I suddenly thought, 'what if his role would be extended to the one of a double agent'. And then I thought, how about replacing him, letting the real JB still be one of the good guys but on the other side, let JB be a killer and that was so tempting I just had to do it.
And if you wonder why JB is still alive (I'm wondering if anyone is), the real JB is dead and has been replaced by his murderer, somehow looking identical as JB. He took the place and then served the FBI as JB. Why, you may ask? You will get to know soon.

And because this whole chapter is about JB, it's alos titled that way and in some kind an appreciation of his character.

How will the story continue?

I can't say yet, truth to be told, I never really can because I'm working with the principle that when I have written soemthing good, you'll get to see it and then I go on, etc.
But judging from my ideas, it will be awesome.

Anything else to say?

Just that I want to hear YOUR comments about the new chapter, about your feelings on the role developing of James Black and what you thought the story until now.
I would really appreciate it, thank you in advance.


The next update is coming soon, maybe tomorrow.