(Kudo Shinichi In Danger) My first fanfiction ever

[conan96]

Here is my fanfiction, http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5497658/1/K ... _In_Danger

I've made eight chapters of it and i update pretty often, it's about what would happen if Gin found out that Conan is Shinichi. So read it if you want, I think it is going pretty well to be my first fanfiction. Don't review this fanfiction just on it's first chapter, the first chapter sucked so much that i rematered it later on. Bye

[Beastly]

No offense hehe.
But dont like the first one yea remastered it. Cause that's not like Gin personality or maybe i just imagined it as Gin being that. And where's the proof that Conan is the one that do the stuffs for Mouri. BTW the boss dont know anything about Conan right? or maybe he's Agasa  . Havent read the 2nd-8th chapters though my review are yet to follow.

[Beastly]

It's very cool pls update this thread thanks.
When's 9th issue. This is cool

[conan96]

I don't have time to make a new chapter today, But chapter nine will be out tomorrow.

[4869]

Very nice , I like it. But too much dialogue for my taste.But the story is very good.
That's just my opinion , I'm not the most competent person to judge fan fictions but like I said I like the story and the whole idea very much.

[karisama]

Hmmm.. needs more detail. The dialogue format gives it a non-serious feel, which isn't good considering it's about the BO. No offence c:

[conan96]

None taken   I've just read that many other fanfiction writers use the ''Someone says something random here'' and then *insert someones name here* said. I tried using the dialogue in a script fashion before and it didn't go so well. Note: Chapter 1 was in script based dialogue and people didn't like it so i changed to the dialogue i'm using now. What type of dialogue do you think would make sound more serious? Also i will update the chapter on Thursday cause i'm on vacation.


PS... Always know that im always open for the negative aspects and how to make them better. Im trying to become a good writer

[conan96]

Chapter nine is out, it's called ''The Reaction'' http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5497658/10/ ... _In_Danger


I use alot of dialogue still i know, but that's my fanfiction style XD

[conan96]

Chapter ten is out (yay random milestone) it's called ''The Bosses Identity'' Enjoy http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5497658/11/ ... _In_Danger

[conan96]

Chapter 11 is out... it's called ''The Second Founder Of The B.O'' Enjoy. Linky here   http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5497658/12/ ... _In_Danger