4869's DC novella

[4869]

The last couple of days I had a very strong desire to write a fan-fiction story about Detective Conan.
I never wrote a fanfiction in my life and English is my second language.

Here it is the rewritten 1216 word long first chapter of the Oceanus Mystery. I hope you'll enjoy it as much as I did while writing it

http://www.megaupload.com/?d=XGR3UVRN Here's the link It's a word document, so I suggest viewing it in the reading layout. 

[ShinRan36]

Heyyy,

i really loved the first chapter, i wonder what the case is going to be?
You described kogoros feelings very well and i identified him with your character..
I am waiting for the next chapter =)

[4869]

Heyyy,

i really loved the first chapter, i wonder what the case is going to be?
You described kogoros feelings very well and i identified him with your character..
I am waiting for the next chapter =)

Thank you so much , regarding your question :It's a real spoiler when you know it beforehand so decide if you want to see the spoiler xD

Spoiler:

Well as the working title says there is going to be some KID action in it , a murder , Conan--->Shinichi ...

[ShinRan36]

Heyyy,

i really loved the first chapter, i wonder what the case is going to be?
You described kogoros feelings very well and i identified him with your character..
I am waiting for the next chapter =)

Thank you so much , regarding your question :It's a real spoiler when you know it beforehand so decide if you want to see the spoiler xD

Spoiler:

Well as the working title says there is going to be some KID action in it , a murder , Conan--->Shinichi ...

I thought the same because of the title like you said ) =)

[4869]

Heyyy,

i really loved the first chapter, i wonder what the case is going to be?
You described kogoros feelings very well and i identified him with your character..
I am waiting for the next chapter =)

Thank you so much , regarding your question :It's a real spoiler when you know it beforehand so decide if you want to see the spoiler xD

Spoiler:

Well as the working title says there is going to be some KID action in it , a murder , Conan--->Shinichi ...

I thought the same because of the title like you said ) =)

Well , i don't want to spoil you the reading thanks again for the positive critic

[ShinRan36]

Heyyy,

i really loved the first chapter, i wonder what the case is going to be?
You described kogoros feelings very well and i identified him with your character..
I am waiting for the next chapter =)

Thank you so much , regarding your question :It's a real spoiler when you know it beforehand so decide if you want to see the spoiler xD

Spoiler:

Well as the working title says there is going to be some KID action in it , a murder , Conan--->Shinichi ...

I thought the same because of the title like you said ) =)

Well , i don't want to spoil you the reading thanks again for the positive critic

Thank you very much =))

Spoiler:

Ich hoffe, dass du noch viele andere Leser haben wirst..

[4869]

Heyyy,

i really loved the first chapter, i wonder what the case is going to be?
You described kogoros feelings very well and i identified him with your character..
I am waiting for the next chapter =)

Thank you so much , regarding your question :It's a real spoiler when you know it beforehand so decide if you want to see the spoiler xD

Spoiler:

Well as the working title says there is going to be some KID action in it , a murder , Conan--->Shinichi ...

I thought the same because of the title like you said ) =)

Well , i don't want to spoil you the reading thanks again for the positive critic

Thank you very much =))

Spoiler:

Ich hoffe, dass du noch viele andere Leser haben wirst..

Spoiler:

Danke schon

[4869]

Added a poll , please vote

[ShinRan36]

ITS GREEAAT

[4869]

ITS GREEAAT

Hahaha xD , did you read the second part i send you?

[ShinRan36]

ITS GREEAAT

Hahaha xD , did you read the second part i send you?

of course its perfecct, shall I comment it now or after you added it here?

[4869]

ITS GREEAAT

Hahaha xD , did you read the second part i send you?

of course its perfecct, shall I comment it now or after you added it here?

Well , since you're the only one who showed interest for my work xD...

[ShinRan36]

ITS GREEAAT

Hahaha xD , did you read the second part i send you?

of course its perfecct, shall I comment it now or after you added it here?

Well , since you're the only one who showed interest for my work xD...

Leider

The chapter is perfect, you described the characters very good and I liked the situation, in which ran is because of shinichis birthday and I am waiting for the new chapter =)

[4869]

ITS GREEAAT

Hahaha xD , did you read the second part i send you?

of course its perfecct, shall I comment it now or after you added it here?

Well , since you're the only one who showed interest for my work xD...

Leider

The chapter is perfect, you described the characters very good and I liked the situation, in which ran is because of shinichis birthday and I am waiting for the new chapter =)

Well i would love to hear critics and advices from the other people. And mostly from the people who are way better in writing than me (and there are many on this forum )

[ShinRan36]

ITS GREEAAT

Hahaha xD , did you read the second part i send you?

of course its perfecct, shall I comment it now or after you added it here?

Well , since you're the only one who showed interest for my work xD...

Leider

The chapter is perfect, you described the characters very good and I liked the situation, in which ran is because of shinichis birthday and I am waiting for the new chapter =)

Well i would love to hear critics and advices from the other people. And mostly from the people who are way better in writing than me (and there are many on this forum )

I can really understand you ..