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akai-kun wrote:
ShinRan36 wrote: heyyy  :o :o :o
these are the best chapters; I think! Very mysterious. Who is the boss? (I think I know who he is..) =))
Write more.. You are talented ! YOu have to use it..
Im a fan of your writing.. RESPECT
YOu describe the actions and all the themes very good.
Hey, thanks.
I'm really glad you liked it~
You think you know who the boss is? - Tell me your guess, please  :D

the boss you mentioned, is the same boss in conan, right?
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So its Black xD
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I finally got around to editing chapter 3. Here are my suggestions
suggestions in bold


Chapter 3

At the same time, at the Kuroba Mansion (Tokyo)…
meanwhile Kuroba Mansion,Tokyo or meanwhile at the Kuroba Mansion in Tokyo

Kaito Kuroba read the newspaper as one single headline on the last page of the newspaper caught his eye. (watch your tense)
Kaito Kuroba was reading the newspaper when one single headline on the last page caught his eye.
‘Robert Sikaln (31) murdered!'
(normally age is found in the body not the headlines)
‘Robert Sikaln murdered!'
‘Robert Sikaln… Sikaln. From where do I know him?'
(Repeating yourself)
‘Robert Sikaln. From where do I know him?'
Then, suddenly, Kaito remembered. (Wordy)
Then Kaito remembered. Or Suddenly Kaito remembered.
‘Right, he was a friend of my father. An old friend, also a magician, I think.' (Clarity)
‘Right, he was an old friend of my father, who was  also a magician, I believe.'

Without thinking for long times, he stood up and went to the hidden room of the mansion where his special clothes were located. (Clarity) (Wordy)
Without thinking for long, Kaito stood up and went to the hidden room where Kids’ clothes were.

And one minute afterwards, Kaito Kid was flying right towards the theatre…(Clarity)
And a minute later, Kaito Kid was flying towards the theatre.

-to be continued!-
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sstimson wrote: I finally got around to editing chapter 3. Here are my suggestions
suggestions in bold


Chapter 3

At the same time, at the Kuroba Mansion (Tokyo)…
meanwhile Kuroba Mansion,Tokyo or meanwhile at the Kuroba Mansion in Tokyo

Kaito Kuroba read the newspaper as one single headline on the last page of the newspaper caught his eye. (watch your tense)
Kaito Kuroba was reading the newspaper when one single headline on the last page caught his eye.
‘Robert Sikaln (31) murdered!'
(normally age is found in the body not the headlines)
‘Robert Sikaln murdered!'
‘Robert Sikaln… Sikaln. From where do I know him?'
(Repeating yourself)
‘Robert Sikaln. From where do I know him?'
Then, suddenly, Kaito remembered. (Wordy)
Then Kaito remembered. Or Suddenly Kaito remembered.
‘Right, he was a friend of my father. An old friend, also a magician, I think.' (Clarity)
‘Right, he was an old friend of my father, who was  also a magician, I believe.'

Without thinking for long times, he stood up and went to the hidden room of the mansion where his special clothes were located. (Clarity) (Wordy)
Without thinking for long, Kaito stood up and went to the hidden room where Kids’ clothes were.

And one minute afterwards, Kaito Kid was flying right towards the theatre…(Clarity)
And a minute later, Kaito Kid was flying towards the theatre.

-to be continued!-
Hey, thank you for your suggestions and I do agree with you.
An edited version is on the way but later this year or in January next year.
Keep it up~ Thx. ;)
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Ok, sad thing I have to say here.

Maybe (not sure yet) I'll have to change plans, estimated release date now is in the week of December 14th to December 20th - for the next release.

Sorry here~  :'(


***EDIT/UPDATE:  After very hard decisions to make and some specific dates I had to learn stuff for and some other things, the message upwards has now been approved. Sorry here, but I hope you won't be too sad about it - next MULTIPLE release is coming this week, so look forward~

Thank you~ ;)
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Ok,

as I promised, here is the next release pack~

But it is not THAT big, it has the next chapter and the additional information on the chapter in it.
But I do hope, you'll like it~

NEXT UPDATE ON:  Christmas (December 24th ~ December 26th)

Enjoy~ ;)

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Chapter 9
Kid was sweating.

Something was totally wrong, he felt it.

‘But what?'

He had just bought himself a cup of coffee to stay awake – after all, it has been a very long day…

He nipped on the coffee and the next thing he knew was nothing…

All went black.

The cup was lying on the ground and Kid wanted to hold to something, but he couldn’t.

And then, he fell…

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Just some few seconds ago…


‘There comes our target. Is the coffee prepared?'

‘Yes, sir. All done.'

‘Good. Start the operation on my command…'

Three men were waiting in a black Van parking just a few meters away from a coffee shop.

Then, a man walked towards the stand and bought a cup of coffee.

He drank.

And the next moment, he was lying unconsciousness on the ground.

‘One. Two. Three. GO!'

Two men hushed out of the car and got to Kid.

They threw him over their shoulders and ran back to the van.

One second afterwards, the van was gone…


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[...] -to be contiuned!- [...]


ADDITIONAL INFORMATION!

Hey there~
About this chapter, I noticed re-reading my story that Kid was going to be forgotten as a main player in this story.
So I decided to make a chapter just about him that 'gives him back' his main role.
This chapter is also pointing at the next ones because then, Kid will have some information that is of the utmost importance for the later story...
But that's enough for spoilers here~

See you soon. ;)



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Waiting for your comments, thx.

Until Christmas!  :D
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Heyyy =)
It really is a short chapter :(((((.
BUT it will br continued so i cant wait to read the next chapters.
What is going on with Kid? Is he(geschnappt xD I dont know the english word :D) ?.
I cant wait to know what will be the next.. What will they do with him?
As always, you are a great writer.
KEEP IT UP ;)
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ShinRan36 wrote: Heyyy =)
It really is a short chapter :(((((.
BUT it will br continued so i cant wait to read the next chapters.
What is going on with Kid? Is he(geschnappt xD I dont know the english word :D) ?.
I cant wait to know what will be the next.. What will they do with him?
As always, you are a great writer.
KEEP IT UP ;)
Thx. ;)
What is going to happen to Kid? - For an answer, you have to wait some little time because the solutin is planned for New Year...  ;D
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Joke, let's see when it's ready~ ;)
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Ok, the release is TOMORROW (December, the 25th)!!!!


FOUR CHAPTERS AT LEAST + ADDITIONAL INFORMATION FOR EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER!!!!!
AND AN EXTRA SURPRISE!!!!!!
Coming all tomorrow, enjoy~



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akai-kun wrote: Ok, the release is TOMORROW (December, the 25th)!!!!


FOUR CHAPTERS AT LEAST + ADDITIONAL INFORMATION FOR EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER!!!!!
AND AN EXTRA SURPRISE!!!!!!
Coming all tomorrow, enjoy~



Until then, merry christmas!! ;)

My friend , I can only say that I'm excited as a child in a candy shop :D
Can't wait :D
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4869 wrote:
akai-kun wrote: Ok, the release is TOMORROW (December, the 25th)!!!!


FOUR CHAPTERS AT LEAST + ADDITIONAL INFORMATION FOR EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER!!!!!
AND AN EXTRA SURPRISE!!!!!!
Coming all tomorrow, enjoy~



Until then, merry christmas!! ;)

My friend , I can only say that I'm excited as a child in a candy shop :D
Can't wait :D
That's a good feeling for what is coming up~
Release is still planned for today, I would say it'll be out in some hours...
;)
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akai-kun wrote:
4869 wrote:
akai-kun wrote: Ok, the release is TOMORROW (December, the 25th)!!!!


FOUR CHAPTERS AT LEAST + ADDITIONAL INFORMATION FOR EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER!!!!!
AND AN EXTRA SURPRISE!!!!!!
Coming all tomorrow, enjoy~



Until then, merry christmas!! ;)

My friend , I can only say that I'm excited as a child in a candy shop :D
Can't wait :D
That's a good feeling for what is coming up~
Release is still planned for today, I would say it'll be out in some hours...
;)

I'm waiting xD I'm gonna refresh this site every 5 minutes :D
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And here we are...
As promised, here is the next multiple release in the series~

This time there are FIVE (!) all-new chapters in it along with additional information on each one of them.
And there is an extra surprise!
Oh, and the surprise is not the new additional information on chapter 9, if you may wonder... ;)

But see for yourself:


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Chapter 10

Dark smoke was all over the place.
Everywhere.
And all was absolutely silent.
People were laying on the ground and the only thing they saw was a big white light in their brains.
They did hear nothing.
Nothing at all was there – except the white light that was everywhere…

Then, black shadows appeared in their minds.
After some seconds, they could see them clearly.
These people were wearing white clothes with some kind of a red sign on them.
The ambulance.

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Meanwhile, some blocks nearby the National Theatre…


Conan looked with shock and anger how the smoke was coloring the blue sky into a completely grew one.
His heart bumped fast.

‘What happened?'

His first thoughts were about the people at the theatre and Inspector Megure.

‘Oh my god. Why on earth did this all happen? Just why?'

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Black Van, Koshirou Street, 10:45h


Kaito Kid didn’t know where he was.
The last thing he remembered was the coffee shop.

‘Boss! He’s awake.'

The voice came from nowhere exactly.
His mind wasn’t strong enough for thinking like he did in ‘normal’ times.
Another voice answered.

‘I see. That’s earlier than we expected. Help him out with sleeping again for a little while, will you?'

‘Sure, Boss.'

Pfff.

The weapon hit his head hard and within a second, he fell unconsciousness once again…

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Chapter 11

‘Sir. We just received word that the target was destroyed successfully.'

‘Good. I am pleased to hear that. Now, focus on getting rid of Vermouth. She has become an unexpected risk for our organization.'

‘Sir… And the boy?'

‘Get rid of him, too. And when you’re at it, destroy all traces that could lead the police to us.'

‘Yes, sir.'

The man wanted to go away but the other one stopped him.

‘Wait. Let the little boy stay alive. I have a better plan to get rid of him – but in a more useful way. And I will play a master role in it, haha.'

‘Understood, Sir.'

The man left as the boss of the organization still laughed.
James Black laughed…

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Chapter 12

National Theatre, 10:50h

Men were rushing through the scene. They were sweating.

‘Leave them all alone, they are all dead. No one survived, except him here. Come here, I need to get him as fast as possible into a hospital or he will be dead in a few minutes.'

The men were hushing Inspector Megure into an ambulance car and drove onto the street.

‘Nearly no pulse. Heartbeat nearly okay. Unconsciousness. That’s not good.'

‘Yeah, that means, he’s in a coma.'

‘We have to get to that hospital!'

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But before they got anywhere near to the hospital, it happened.
The driver couldn’t do anything.
A black van speeded up and up and crashed into the ambulance car.
The car lost track on the street and then, it was flying through the air.
The head of the driver hit a fire extinguisher and he was dead instantly.
Then, the car came back to the ground again but for what price…
The car was in flames.
And as the head of the ambulance team looked on his left and right side, he was shocked.

‘No… No, that can’t be. NO!'

All men were dead – except him.
Without really noticing it, four men came into the car.
They wear black clothes and they were armed.
They got the doctor and Inspector Megure out of the car and pushed them towards the black van.
And after they drove away, the ambulance car exploded…

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‘All clear. Get that damn masks of. And torture that doctor until he tells us everything he knows about us from this Inspector…'

The doctor was frightened.
He only stumbled.

‘No, please, I don’t… I… Know nothing. Really, I swear. I…'

‘Get rid of that, man. We’ll kill you in every case, so you should better tell us what you know, okay?'

‘Y-Yes.'

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Chapter 13

Conan’s eyes were filling up with tears.

‘NO! NO!'

He couldn’t accept it that Inspector Megure and all the others at the National Theatre were dead.
He just couldn’t accept it.
He couldn’t.


He needed reinforcements if he wanted to find out the truth.
And his choice were Inspector Nakamori and Kogoro Mori…

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Chapter 14

First, Conan wanted to inform Kogoro of the current situation.
He felt a little bit better as he thought of the fact that he would see Ran in a few minutes…
But as he arrived at the detective agency, he knew that something was wrong…
Terribly wrong…

He took the stairs as fast as he could and opened the entry door to the main agency.
And then, he stopped.
His eyes widened in shock and anger…

The desk from where Kogoro was coordinating his work, was covered with blood.
And something was laying on the desk…
A small notice.

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‘Gin!'

He turned his back and he gasped.
Kogoro Mori was laying on the couch and his face showed horror on it.
He had several bullet holes in his head and chest.
He was dead…

And then Conan remembered the notice.
Then, get upstairs to your lovely Ran…
His brain was now full of anger and hate, he wanted revenge.
But there was also the fear he felt about Ran…
As he entered Ran’s room, he collapsed.

But before Conan got unconsciousness, he saw Ran laying on the floor with her throat cut with a knife.
The several knife marks meant that she had been tortured before she was killed with two shots in her head.

It was horrible and Conan fell to the ground…

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ADDITIONAL INFORMATION


CHAPTER 9

Chapter 9? – Yeah, that was the chapter where Kid was getting kidnapped.
First, it’s funny to say ‘Kid has been kidnapped…' – so that’s the main reason why I wrote that one.
No, only joking.
I re-read the latest chapters and Kid wasn’t in it. So I decided to write a chapter that should get Kid back his main role in this story.
Furthermore, in one of the next chapters (we’re now coming closer and closer to chapters 15+) there will be the first introduction for the reason for this kidnapping.
Because in the later story, Kid will have information of the utmost importance for these… – well, let’s just say at the moments that they’re ‘not-so-normal’ people. ;-)

But that’s enough for spoilers in here, read on!


CHAPTER 10

Yes, and here I got back to the explosion at the theatre.
Because it would be impossible to write about a big explosion and then not going on with this idea.
So that’s why I now have caught up again with the main story.
And the thing with Kid, he won’t be awake for a while because these people have matters to be discussed without him – but think what you want.

It was just fun to knock Kid out a second time~ ;-)


CHAPTER 11

AND HERE IS THE BIG SURPRISE!
The boss of the organization is no one else than JAMES BLACK, the head of the FBI.
Why is this?
According to the hints, Goshô Aoyama did give about the mysterious boss, it has to be someone we already knew and that didn’t do much for the organization in a public way.
Furthermore, the organization has a spy in the FBI network.
That’s why I decided to let James Black to be the boss.

And to ShinRan36: Yes, you were right~ ;-)

There will be definitely more developing of his character with the on-going story, so keep up with every new chapter the next times.


CHAPTER 12

And Megure is NOT dead, but he is nearby.
He lays in a coma.
That way, I didn’t let him die now, but maybe he will later time…
(SPOILER???!!!!????!!!!)
And now the action I promised comes back with this and the next chapters.
I hope you enjoy reading them~
And it becomes more mysterious than ever with the information that also Megure has some information of the utmost importance.

What are they? And what is going on?

Find it out sometime later in the next chapters.


CHAPTER 13

Ok, that one IS really really short, but it had to be.
It was the shortest way to introduce the upcoming events in some way.
For this chapter, I will not tell anymore because this one is short and shrouded in mystery~


CHAPTER 14

Here’s some horror again…
Kogoro and Ran are dead – both murdered by the black organization!
With this chapter, I wanted to get a little bit deeper into Conan’s character and I will get deeper into him with one of the next chapters.
What also is important to know about this chapter is the fact that Conan’s back-up and hold has died.
That is pointing at…
Make your own guess about what this all is pointing at~

See you next time!



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And that was the multiple release for today~
I hope you enjoyed reading and that you like it.
Please comment, thx. ;)

The next update will be (most likely) at NEW YEAR!!!! (December 31th ~ January 01st)

Until then, a left merry Christmas and a happy new year!

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Just to give you some suspense for the next release:

(Yes, I know it's mean~  ;D )


THE NEXT CHAPTERS WILL HAVE A NEW CHARACTER IN IT AND THEY WILL START WITH A LITTLE BACKTRIP!!!!
And there is a story-important chapter in it that will make it (maybe) necessary to (re-)read my last fanfiction about Kid and Nakamori, but that's enough for spoilering in here~

Oh, and the next chapter will be LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONG and great!!!


See you~ ;)
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akai-kun wrote: Just to give you some suspense for the next release:

(Yes, I know it's mean~  ;D )


THE NEXT CHAPTERS WILL HAVE A NEW CHARACTER IN IT AND THEY WILL START WITH A LITTLE BACKTRIP!!!!
And there is a story-important chapter in it that will make it (maybe) necessary to (re-)read my last fanfiction about Kid and Nakamori, but that's enough for spoilering in here~

Oh, and the next chapter will be LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONG and great!!!


See you~ ;)
Until then, please comment, thx!
The chapters you posted yesterday = WIN !
Can't wait to see more ! :D
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